It needs some work... I'd like to see it improve.
It was good, but the dialogue boxes need to be the same size. Maybe a quick transition would be of help. It's almost like a slideshow in the beginning... I think the story was fine, but the dialogue needs to be spaced out. Line 1 and Line 2, so to speak. If you add some more actual animation and movement, this would earn my 4.
Also, when you scale images try to use the "Scale" button and THEN drag the corners.
Thank you for your comments. i do try. my later stuff is much better.
This is EXACTLY what I thought of New Super Mario Bros. Wii!
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